Siddhartha Rana

English 1100

12/15/2018

 

                                                             My Progression.

 

Dear journal,
     

    It has been a hell of a week for finals and tremendous amounts of assignments to submit. As described by most of my peers who have already graduated, college is very distinctive and arduous compared to high school. In my high school years, I received a lot of assistance from my teachers to understand each subject and perceived that I could handle whatever is coming for me after. However, similar to a video game simulation, high school was just the tutorial and college is the actual start of a journey on a very different level and I can ensure you with each year the scale will keep continue increasing. To keep up with the game, we should keep upgrading our characters by learning a new set of skills, approaching the level on a different way, etc. Vastly similar to my situation I should keep enhancing my skills to tackle any level without using cheat codes.
       
   As English is not my first language, it was strenuous for me progress my skills and the question of “theory of writing” was oblivious to me. Relating back towards my idea of the video game simulation, it felt like I have been handed a different set of controls to tackle with each level. But with all the experiences I have been through in recent years, I am conscious about the topic and have developed my own theory of writing (gameplan) to challenge any difficulty.

   However, learning is a process with patience and correct instructions. Not every level can be accomplished without any failure or pressure. So as a writer It is crucial for me to keep on upgrading and polish my skills.    
      I perceive that every writer has evolved based on experiences. Writing is a journey of thoughts, stories or blending of consistent words which allows the writer to create his/her affirmations about a specific condition or genre. Before the start of this first semester in college, I had little-known skills about how to approach an essay of a given situation. It was a cluster of words, sentences throughout the whole paper without any underlying correspondence of the specific rhetorical situation. But as time progressed, I believe writing should be a set a step that determines the connection of each sentence concerning the audience, genre, thesis, and etc. To construct a well-developed paper that comprehends the 3rd person about the specific topic. Today, the purpose behind to write my journal entry is to display the improvements and skills that I have acquired as a writer throughout my first semester in college.
       In my first assignment of the semester, I had to write about the topic of gun violence which is a prominent rhetorical situation in the United States. With the assistance of 4 different sources, I was able to emphasize the rhetorical terms towards the reader about the situation. However, there was not a specific connection between the chosen author and their stance/genre about the topic.

Sept 3, 2018

Stance: Noticing the terms from this disquisition Dr. Frattaroli specifies informatively by giving the audience the basic strategies about how to resolve this issue of Gun Violence in America by approaching it by a medical field so, it benefits the general public in an innocuous manner. The “healthcare providers and physicians are an important source for the public and a valued constituency for policymakers” (fra 8-9)

Genre: This scholarly article is  from the website “Annals of internal medicine.” A site for people in the field of medicine and health. There are options to put comments in direct for this article. So, it is an opinion piece of Dr. Frattaroli that could be criticized or supported by the General public.  

 

Noticing my weakness of not capable enough to construct the connection of the author’s Stance and Genre, my essay was not comprehensible towards the instructor and my other peers. Moreover, with the intervention of peer review, I was able to secure my weakness and be flexible with my words in order to put forward the specific connection introduced by the author.

 

Stance: Dr. Frattaroli is in opposition towards the gun violence by referencing gun violence as “public health problem” and with statical information that “on average 285 people every day find themselves on the wrong end of the gun” (Fra 24).

Genre: This article is an opinion piece because along with the 5 strategies, Dr. Frattaroli utilizes the terms “physicians can”and implements statistics of “more than 31000 people in this country died…its victims” (fra 23) in order for the audience to criticize or support the procedure.

In addition from the same assignment in the introductory paragraph. I was not aware of the importance of the thesis in any given essay. The argument provides the primary purpose of why the piece is written and also the stance of the author. Without the thesis, my theme was a paradigm of a lifeless body. In order to elaborate more for my theory of writing, it was a necessary step to play with my words to induce the formality and display the particular stance by applying the thesis.

Violence is a consumer of the strength of many relationships that manifest hatred. It has been the answer to many world problems, and it still is. But, the truth is suppressed for the youth by teaching them “Violence is not the answer.” For America, it faces a new challenge that has impeded a prosperous nation. Gun Violence has destroyed many innocent lives of children, mothers, fathers, etc. But this issue has been disregarded regardless of all the social movements, institutions that are assembled to annihilate this topic.

Implementing the thesis genuinely assisted in making my essay well fortified and coherent. It was a deficient essay nevertheless, with the assistance of my peers I was able to develop the thesis to make my claims much more focused on the rhetorical situation.

Violence is a consumer of the strength of many relationships that manifest hatred, despair, and insanity. It has been the answer to many world problems, and it still is. But, the truth is suppressed for the youth by teaching them “Violence is not the answer.” For America, it faces a new challenge that has impeded a prosperous nation. Gun Violence has destroyed many innocent lives of children, mothers, fathers, etc. But this issue has been disregarded regardless of all the social movements, institutions that are assembled to annihilate this topic. In this essay, opposing the issue of Gun Violence in America and with the assistance of the from four primary sources. My objective is to elucidate how dangerous this topic of gun violence influences the public, future generations and also display in depth about the procedures to annihilate Gun violence in America.

       Throughout the semester, there were many terms and skills I was able to pick up as a prominent commodity for my accessories as a writer. The “Audience” is an important figure that determines the support or opposition of the writer’s stance and also how timely the chosen topic is concerning the rhetorical situation. As a learning process, I have able to identify the audience of any specific circumstance or question which also allows me to accomplish my purpose of writing. It is important to research who the audience is with the reference of the chosen topic. For example, my issue of gun violence in America can be addressed towards the large audience of American people which is very comprehensive. So in order to acquire the specificity of the audience, the topic should also be explicit towards the rhetorical situation.
    Reiteratively from the source based essay, I was not able to adequately address or recognize the actual audience about the author’s stance. So, the connection was feeble, and the purpose of the article was not entirely absolute

Audience: In my opinion,  Lopez is trying to grab every American People’s attention to show “America maintains some of the weakest gun laws in the developed world… anywhere else ( Lopez 90-91).

       As informed, I was not aware of the fact of how the audience plays a prominent role in determining the critics and also the objective of my paper. The connection I created from Lopez’s article was ambiguous for my audience so, my instructor emphasized to connect towards the citation of the author and the primary purpose of why he addressed the situation to the audience. Furthermore, from the draft – my paper displayed the strides of informality towards the reader.

      So, my assignment was not represented as an Academic Paper. My selection does present the idea of what audience the author was stressing to address the situation of implementing a medical strategy to control the Gun Violence in America. But, with the lack of compounding sentences and the order of treating the evidence from the author, my statement was unclear. Confused but surely, I was able to detect the issue with my sentence regarding the audience. With the addition of compound wording and following the basis of formal writing, I was competent to determine the connection of the audience.

Audience: The intended audience addressed by Lopez is for the individuals to obtain information about the Gun violence statistics around the world and also towards the American people. “The  US was one of 17 countries (out of 195) in which both firearm homicides… median”(Lopez 21).

      The second assignment of the semester required me to write an inquiry-based essay with the same prominent topic of gun violence. This assignment allowed me to be more unambiguous to my audience by querying how the firearms reach into the wrong hands and what necessary gun control measures can the federal branch implement regarding the issue. In respect towards my theory of writing, constructing a well-developed connection of the author and the realizing the actual audience was also my learning process to develop my skills as a writer. So for this reason, I informed the importance of implementing credible gun control measures for the issue of Gun Violence in America to address the people/political parties with their own respective agendas about the growing gun violence problem.
From my first draft of this essay, the thesis was clear, and my stance was reprehensible but again I had difficulty towards realizing the substantial audience of each author that I had handpicked to develop my resolution of the conferred question.

Nov,5,2018

Relating to the topic of the 2nd amendment, the argument of the right to bear arms has created the division of the people or political parties. With an open-mindset, it will be much easier for many Americans to conclude this barbarity, but there is an  “extent that there may be some division between the trustworthy and the untrustworthy, it is not possible to devise a regulatory scheme that can effectively distinguish between the two” (Carl1). Clark claims and suggests the audience that the gun measures should be exemplified for the other gun policies by the federal branch because no one should be able to get firearms, except those who of the law-abiding citizens.” There will be fewer handguns for the public and “only one kind that works – and it is this: anything that significantly reduces the number of handguns in general circulation” (Carl 3).

 

    Throughout the lines, as my skills had strengthened as a writer by displaying the audiences and the connection towards the author’s stance. I was incompetent to inform the specific gun measures that the federal government should implement that lead to confusion throughout my statement. For this assignment, research was the most crucial factor to write this inquiry-based paper which was also a new commodity that I have acquired in this semester. In my high school years, research was mostly ignored by most teachers so following the same concept weakened my claims and the purpose of this paper.  Researching in more depth about Clark’s claims I was able to identify the specific gun control measures, and I was able to implement them by compounding with my words.

Relating to the topic of the 2nd amendment, the argument of the right to bear arms has created the division of the people or political parties, where both sides are not willing to hear or come to compromise a necessary strategy. With an open-mindset, it will be much easier for many Americans to conclude this barbarity, but there is an  “extent that there may be some division between the trustworthy and the untrustworthy, it is not possible to devise a regulatory scheme that can effectively distinguish between the two” (Carl1). But, it does not conclude that gun control is not effective.  As Carl displays the two model; “(1) everyone may possess a handgun except those who cannot, and (2) no one may possess a handgun except those who can.” Clark claims and suggests the audience that the second model should be exemplified for the other gun policies by the federal branch because the “second model presumptively grants a right to own a handgun to no one, except those who demonstrably fit into special categories.” There will be fewer handguns for the public and “only one kind that works – and it is this: anything that significantly reduces the number of handguns in general circulation” (Carl 3).

 

     Along with all the strategies/skills I have acquired as a writer throughout this semester. My theory of writing has been progressed steadily but assuredly. Not being able to take other classes that consist of writing essays because of my academic probation, my entire focus was only subjected to this class. So, it was convenient for me to progress abundantly. As I restate my position of how English is not my first language and I had problems with identifying the proper instructions of the assignments given. With the assistance of my peers and my instructor, I was competent enough to make it this far strengthening exceptionally with my course of the speech along the theory of my writing.  
Concerning my idea of how college is similar to a video game simulation, as time progresses the levels will keep on escalating, and as a writer, I should keep on upgrading my skills and strategies. Even so, there will be failures ahead I will have to keep a positive mindset because “you should never stop learning because life never stops teaching.”
                                                                                                                   -Emmily Vara